I don't usually do critiques of computer game stuff but I will for this to help you with a couple of technical points.
Fist the music it was either a very bad recording to begin with or somewhere during the processing it was clipping/to loud/distorting.
The second thing was the object at the top of the screen (poss a mirror ball or a thumb print on the film) needed to be clearer and used or removed.
One last point, I kept thinking guy bar when watching it ! lol