Well firstly, let's all just remember that this is supposed to be amature... what I just watched borders on semi professional editing... very good! It's great to hear another Aussie accent on this UK site, so cheers again.
There is nothing to suggest when viewing this clip with "amature" in mind...
If you did want to take another couple of steps towards semi-professional video, I believe the narrator/voice-over needs to be improved... you could do it again with beter sound recording equipment? It takes a bit of practice when narrating to correctly round the words etc... so i believe that's the next thing to work on for ya... but you're miles ahead of my skills, so good work!
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