Thread: Bloody Shame: Short Comedy Film

Well done, I didn't the gag coming.

Good script and great deadpan delivery of an absurd story.

Nice opening with the glidetrack shot then the pull focus.
Then some fairly "ordinary" shot/reverse shot stuff whilst you setup the gag
Then a great mix of varied action shots with some fast cut editing
Then back to the "ordinary" shot/reverse shot for the delivery of the punch-line.

It worked well, but the icing on the cake for me would be to create some visual interest at the end (we have it at the beginning then the middle - the classic "W" shape requires it at the end as well). I haven't a suggestion to make though so I'm not really being very helpful, ami I.

I think Tim wants to see a shot of a plastic dog turd.

Haha, yeah thanks Tim I know what you mean. I'll tell the DP to not be so boring next time :P

I'm glad you guys got a chuckle out of it.

Very good. Precise and paced well to keep us interested. You two work well together I would like to see you put the effort into something a bit longer tbh. Have you anything in the pipeline?

Originally Posted by Midnight Blue

Well done, I didn't the gag coming.

Did you see the subliminal?

What do you guys use to record your audio ?

I like it, well filmed and good acting. The gag is a bit lazy but for a start, you guys are doing great.

I'm being a bit thick here - what was the significance of the whisk?