ok, ok, i know it is not for everyone, and some of the stuff was a little off-beat, it would have been more entertaining if there had been an audiance.

This is just a friendly challange to the people who posted replies... I would love to see anyone of you give it a go, just try to do 10 minutes or so... Dont give me any excusess, it sounds like you are the experts, so show me what you can do... Once you do something as good as that or better; that is when I will take your comments seriously...

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moldy, the fact is your trying to be a funny standup comedian and your not... u know how many standups are around... your video's are probably on the bottom of the list

Moldy - I don't subscribe to the "if you don't like it, let's see you do better" line. Just because I don't do something doesn't mean I can't comment on it!

I'm an ice hockey fan. I got annoyed at a player once. Some guy said "well I'd like to see you do better!" And I told him "but i'm not claiming to BE a hockey player". My point is, the people that are criticising you aren't claiming to be funny. Of course you can't please all the people all of the time, different people find things funny, but I struggle to find anything in there that even raised a smile.

Basically, if you try to say you're doing something and not fulfilling that, you've done badly.

I work part time at a weekly comedy club. I've seen hundreds of comedians in the past couple of years, from new people doing their first gig to comedy veterans bringing the house down, so I feel that, although I have never performed it myself, I have a pretty good idea of what's good and what isn't, and I can quite honestly say that your "routine" was one of the least funny routines I've ever seen. It's like you didn't even *try* to be funny. You're not making jokes, you're pointing out facts of everyday life without even a comic twist of any kind!

Your "stage manner" is flat, you're not putting any effort into the delivery, you're not creating laughs, you're just talking. That's not comedy, that's a monologue. And monologues are usually interesting in some way, but yours doesn't have a focal point. You don't have a gimmick to rely on, there's no situation that you exploit for comedic or dramatic effect, there's nothign challenging, shocking or even interesting in there, there is no clever word play, no rhythmic structure, no emotion, no feeling, so for you to challenge us all to "do better" is a bit like asking someone to find something that smells nicer than a damp dog.

I normally wouldn't post a reply to videos I don't like, but your attitude to challenge people just made me want to do it. I'm sorry if it sounds harsh, but if you want to be funny, then seriously, delete everything you've ever done and start again. Watch other comedians (and I don't just mean the ones you see on TV). Watch what they do, watch how they perform, watch and listen to their techniques. If you're really interested in it, maybe try going on a comedy course or something.

But, as someone who's involved in the one of the comedy clubs in the UK that's most respected by circuit comics, I really would advise you to look at what you're doing from someone else's perspective and then you'll see that what you're doing isn't funny. Full stop.

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The video has been taken down, so no one will ever have to sit through the agony or embarrassment again...

It has been a month since i did that, and i havent done it since.. Right now i am working on a game show, so get ready for that...

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wow.. mike pretty much said it all....... i especially agree with his comment that most of the people criticising your video's arent claiming to be a comedian of any kind. We dont have claim to be a comedian to know whats funny and whats not. I guess just keep working at it. Me and my cousins do all kindsa stuff for our cd's - skits, songs, prank calls - and our first CD was terrible, no one liked it, but our newer stuff is a big success... the more experience you have at doing something, the better you will get

yeah, sedgej, that was just one episode of a show that i have been doing for 3 years, and it is the only one with stand up comedy but some of the other stuff might be more to your likings....


here is episode 27...

http://www.neptune.com/users/twj2/vi...twj2245097.wmv

http://www.neptune.com/users/twj2/vi...twj2245510.wmv

http://www.neptune.com/users/twj2/vi...twj2247092.wmv

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havent gotten a chance to watch any of the vidz above yet, but what do u make all this for? just for fun and to post on your website - or is there ne thing more.. .. just curious

:lol:

Just watched Episode 27....

Some nice ideas in there, I liked the song and you're very creative with effects and the like (licking rocks with John!!! LIfe without Arms WTF?!) ... but the laughs just don't work for me - if you spent more time getting better material this could be great... you might be at episode 6 instead of episode 29, but hey, if George Lucas takes 30 years for 6 movies....

Ever seen the movie "The King Of Comedy"? You kind of remind me of Rupert Pupkin.... :lol: