In general I think it's a lot better, a few of the shots that never worked for me before, that you have kept, work better here.
The music works for me as it's a good balance that shouldn't offend anyones ears regardless of their music tastes. I seen Andy mentioned smart sound, but I'm not sure if you used something of your own. If it is a (multi-track) quick track there's a little change I'd make.
At 1:12 there's a prominent instrument/happening (I'm not great with whats going on with music terms) that fades away, comes back for a short time, fades away again at around 1:27 then back at 1:29. I'd keep it totally away between 1:12 and 1:29. If this is possible I think it could work well.
Introducing more shots before the introduction of people works better.
I'm still not a fan of the bird feeder shot, but now it doesn't change the pace of the edit, so it works better.
I think the splash after the icicle works better in this edit. I'd put it down to the movement in the title acting as a transitioning action between the shots.
And the shot between the ECU (eyes) and the church group works better now. I had a problem with this before as I felt it never worked, but knew it should be there.
The movement in your titles make a big difference, it's up to you of course, but I'd see how they look coming on screen bottom left, or right, rather than dead centre.