I thought it had it's funny moments. BUT the main thing about this piece is the inconsistancy. Some bits sound fine, some sound horrible. Some bits look ok, some bit look horrible. When you are shooting a movie you have to learn to keep sound levels the same, the exposure balanced with each clip etc. Another thing that would help your movies would be using a tripod to keep the shots steady. For hand held shots they are mostly well done but using a tripod would give you a better look to the movie.
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