Where to start? The acting was bad. The camara was so shaky it made my head hurt! The editing needs work and the music with the credits was cut off.
I don't know what you use to edit but if you can fade the music out that would work best. At the end of the day all that matters is having fun. If you plan on doing this as a profession then take some class at you local CC and read what posted here on this site. You only get better with practice so keep at it! and keep posting you video's.