It's a good concept, funny punchline - well done at all of that.
Originally Posted by ctbullet
But don't trim - hack away. Needs big chunks taken out of the middle. You could lose 30 seconds without any issues and this would be a vast improvement. The issue is the middle part made me want to turn off because it is soooooo ponderous. If you turn it into something snappy, you will have a really good little short.
Last edited by gorillaonabike; 01-22-2014 at 05:20 PM.
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