I like it a lot. Well done guys.
Midnight Blue Productions M.M.Inst.V.
Hmmm.... I actually missed what had gone on the first time, then it dawned on me and I thought "good call". A clever idea, but for me there were two flaws.
"I met a stranger called John" - if you're going off with someone (even if you're writing it pretending to be someone else) that seems a rather unlikely phrase to use.
I'm also not comnvinced we get to see quite enough motive for his actions - or we don't see the reaction fo apotential murderer - we just see a guy more likely to simply walk away. But it's a delicate balance between giving the audience just enough and ramming it down their throats, so fair play.