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    As a good "student", I'd like to submit my home work. Bubblegum Alley - Believe It Or Not! - YouTube



    Tried to address Tim's comments, but quite not there yet... Worked on a story, I hope it's interesting enough. Also, tried to add more people shots. Completely agree, I does make it more alive considering a "boring" main subject of the clip - a wall. I still need to improve my camera work - I love to pan and walk with a camera, but to make it look better, I will probably need a stabilizer. Also, simplified the closing slate.

    Let me know if you have any comments... I should probably put it in a separate post.


    [Moved to new thread. One video per thread please or the comments get confused]
    Last edited by mrzee; 08-08-2012 at 07:17 AM.

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    This is just about perfect for the subject matter. Perfect length, perfect light hearted commentary, all the right shots.
    I liked the opening in monochrome and the angle you put on it.
    I think I find it disgusting but fascinating.
    Great job!
    Tim

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    Quick and to the point. I could totally see that as an insert into a larger general knowledge / topical tv programme.

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    Quote Originally Posted by TimStannard View Post
    This is just about perfect for the subject matter. Perfect length, perfect light hearted commentary, all the right shots.
    I liked the opening in monochrome and the angle you put on it.
    I think I find it disgusting but fascinating.
    Great job!
    Yes, that should have been the title: "Disgusting but fascinating"!

    Just curious, did you not feel the need for a short history "lesson"? Usually, when I see this kind of documentaries (which are usually longer) - they give you much more historic background on the subject. All I have is a short mentioning of when and how this wall was possibly created. Maybe, I should have expanded it more...

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    Only in America.
    I think you did a great job with this. I thought the VO was especially well done.

    I do feel you missed a trick, you could have spelt out "THE END" in bubble gum.

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    Quote Originally Posted by mrzee View Post
    Just curious, did you not feel the need for a short history "lesson"?
    No. I'm with you in that usually I'd want to know a bit more about it, but I think you would have needed to lengthen the film to accommodate it. If you lengthened it, it would be less of a curiosity and more of a documentary. Which I think would have killed it. Of course, I may be wrongs and a 3 min doco might work well, but i really liked this for what it was (and it seems others do as well).
    Tim

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    Quote Originally Posted by clay_9 View Post
    Quick and to the point. I could totally see that as an insert into a larger general knowledge / topical tv programme.
    Thank you. Yes, the intend was to keep it short, like Tim has said to give you a peak but no more...

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    Quote Originally Posted by Midnight Blue View Post
    Only in America.
    I think you did a great job with this. I thought the VO was especially well done.

    I do feel you missed a trick, you could have spelt out "THE END" in bubble gum.
    Yeah... I don't think I would expect to find a wall like this somewhere in Europe. Good idea about adding an artistic THE END... ask the kids to to id, and show it with x5 speed.

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    Quote Originally Posted by TimStannard View Post
    If you lengthened it, it would be less of a curiosity and more of a documentary. Which I think would have killed it.
    Very good point.

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    I really enjoyed this, it looks very well done. You have obviouly learned a lot already as a film student, from the filming style to the narrative and sound recording, to the editing, it looks very slick and professional. Just the right length too, it's like a mini news report in documentary style that captures and holds your interest.

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