Well done guys this was a very ambitious effort. Haven't you been told never to work with children and psychos. Once I got into the story I did find myself wanting to know what happens next so that's a big plus point. Some funny ideas and lines and some of it acted well but that side was a bit hot & cold. One of the main technical errors was the colour balancing for the interior shots at the beginning. example the shot of swearing at the kids was obviously shot when the kids weren't there but you didn't match the white balance with the previous shot, that was just one example of many.
The continuity (both with sound and image) was a problem for a lot of the beginning part of the piece and this nearly made me switch off but I wanted to push through and I'm glad I did as you have some very funny ideas but not always the skill or experience to execute them as well as they could be done. Example the fight scene was a very good idea which would have been loads funnier if you upped the pace of the action. I liked all the elements which you had but and I think they should all stay, you just need to shorten each element. This occurred a number of times throughout the piece.
On the whole I found it an ambitious entertaining piece.