Hi and welcome.
You'll get accurate an constructive criticism here, but please remember negative comments aren't personal - they're about the film and not about you and you should see them as areas for potential improvement.
My comments based on the first minute or so:
The shot is poorly composed. The main focus of the shot is the main character's right shoulder. his head is cut off.
Virtually all the lines are delivered with the main character facing away from us. A camera placed outside the car on the other side would be far better.
You are using the on-camera mic so the only lines which are picked up clearly are thsoe where he talks to camera. The lines he delivers to the hatch are more difficult to make out (this is compounded by the fact there are no visual cues from his mouth movements as we can't see it). The lines from people outside the car are almost totally lost. Get some means of recording into a mic which is not on the camera.
This is all shot from one camera angle. Very easy to lose interest. Needs more angles, some close-ups, some cutaways.
It is full of jump cuts. this is where you cut from one shot from the same camera to another. It's just horrible to watch: there are sunnden jumps in position iog the main characters, characters in the background suddenly disappear or appear, the light can suddenly change. It all kills any feeling of continuity. If you have to edit out a bad bit, always cut to another angle, or insert a cutaway.
Sometmes time is meant to have passed between two shots, but there is no indication (other than another jump cut). You need to indicate this somehow. If you're going between two shots from the same angle, the only way I can think of is to fade to a colour (normally black) between them.
If you're serious about making films - even as a hobby - these are all simple things which you'll pick up very quickly but will make a massive difference between your films and all the "point the camera and hope for the best" movies out there.
Just before posting I thought I'd scan forward and I see a totally different video! Considerably better - lots of different angles, cutaways, closeups, a clear voiceover.
Why did you waste 1.30 on that foor intro? Most people will have switched off within 10 secs on YouTube.
An I wasted a minute watching it then 10 mins posting comments!