Flatmates - Understanding Women - Short Comedy

[jonnywalks]

Hi All,

See what you think, my second attempt based on feedback from first:


Any comments more than welcome, Jonny

[Rembrandt Rob]

Technically very good. I liked the composition and the lighting. The sound went a bit at times but that might just be the YouTube compression (it does that occasionally).
I thought there was a bit of over-acting in a couple of places though.

Apart from that, nicely done...but... Why, oh why, did you put the "here comes a comedy" music at the start?

[TimStannard]

Same comments as the last one. Though this didn't suffer the drag after the punchline.

[enc]

enjoyed that

but, did i hear a touch of distortion ?

watched your toe nail episode too..... very enjoyable.

[solway]

Technically very good other than distortion on sound as mentioned above.

[jonnywalks]

Thanks for the feedback all Still working on the sound, it's a work in progress, I'm not sure that the YouTube compression helped either. Still much to learn, so any feedback is welcome

Thanks, Jonny

[vidmanners]

Good show, - on Audio: How did you record the sound? was it close-mic'd, it sounded too focussed to be on-camera. The woman was a tad overloaded at one point, maybe got into the part, after levels were set.
Was there pro-gear in use? certainly could have been...
Did I miss it? I didn't get the relationship between them until quite late - only he said he "had a date" up to then I though they were married, but if this is part of a "series" that's why.

Good show.

[Midnight Blue]

Vid, May be the clue was in the title "Flatmates".

Like the others I thought the sound overloaded at one point. but generally good. I'm warming to these two people now that I've seen them more than once. I am thinking your material needs to be just a little bit better as standards are very high in this sector with American sitcoms having large teams of writers etc.

I did enjoy this but had to repeat the punch line to get it as the actor sort of looses diction when saying it.

[jonnywalks]

Interesting! Thanks so much for the comments. Very useful and practical. I'm experimenting with the sound to try and make it better, that one was done with radio mics and I believe at 12bit sound (if that makes sense?). Although I don't think the YouTube upload is helping much as it isn't quite that bad.

Thanks again, Jonny

[TFV]

Excellent. I liked the shot reverse shot through out the composition. Very well presented and it reminded me of the Mel Gibson film "What Women Want" ( he got the clothes on and the make up to really get into their heads). I loved the short plot and especially the sting at the end where , after she'd basically called him a creep, he came back with a comment about having a date. I wonder though there was just one word that I could not hear properly about complimenting her sister on what???? Nicely done.