I think you did a good job generally, A few tweaks with the colour and exposure is needed in places. I like that you had a beginning, the middle bit went on to long and then there was no real end. It just sort of ended. I would have intermixed the raised camera shots with the ground level shots to give the piece some variety in the middle rather than leaving them until the end of the video.
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thanks a lot