Loads more thought went into this than may at first be apparent - although I hope it makes it something persuasive still.
Note huge dof - usually I am mr shallow.
No zoom, no pan, no tracking.
Lots of attention to composition. All shot are deliberately composed with a strong centre vertical in the hope that this gives it a very arresting and weird vibe.
Edit points carefuly chosen.
5 black frames of black between many shots where they dont link in another way.
For ages I have wanted to do a film like this but I wanted to do that john betcheman poem about slough, in slough - " come friendly bombs and fall on slough, it's not fit for people now " - great poem.
I still might as i really like the poetry video thing.
I really liked it - shows how the simple approach can often be the most effective! Now if this were a poetry forum ... well, I'd rip into it but seeing as though we're about video, I'll say cheers, nice production
I think it has just the right mixture of arty and earthy. The shots are intriguing - everyday views which we see time & time again but never actually look at against a matter of fact narration about the fate of victorian lavatories which neither condemns nor glorifies the reasons for their closure, in language which is neither prissy nor shocking.
I hope its up for VOTM so that all seven of us can vote for it.