Itís better than the other video on the same subject; some of the shots are great.
Problem is you are still too far away from the subjects; you have to fill the frame. It seems to me your video is done from a perspective of a distant onlooker; you have to be in there almost getting trampled underfoot.
For extra impact I would have some crazy reverse edits, and get some camera tilt going, all this up and down shooting is a tad boring. Using some Dutch tilt would enable you to have the vertical action fill the frame in a totally different way.
Your subject matter deserves a radical approach.
I hope this is something to consider, well done on whatís been shot.