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    Default First short film

    Hi All,
    Wanted to share my first short film - [ame="http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wA1Bybu3rpc"]YouTube - Just War - Short Film[/ame] .

    Camera: Canon HV-30
    Edit: Sony Vegas
    Comp: After Effects CS3
    3D: Project Messiah
    Budget: under $500 USD
    Time: 5 months


    Here are some before and afters also -

    http://www.paulzanna.com/justwar/images/justwar1.jpg

    http://www.paulzanna.com/justwar/images/justwar2.jpg

    http://www.paulzanna.com/justwar/images/justwar3.jpg

    Comments, rates and critiques always welcome.

    Regards

    Paul

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    I thought that was a great effort. The opening shot of the four soldier walking towards the camera was superb.
    The first cut to silence - immediately after the bombing - was very effective, but the following two seemed like mistakes (like you'd forgotten to add in the background noise)
    Music - well chosen & matched.
    How was it done? Green screen? If so you've matched it up & keyed it very well.

    Weakest link - the dialogue. Particularly in the opening scenes. It was far too "You say this, then I'l say that, then you say this"
    Listen to people converse. People overlap each others words. You could improve on this with what you've got simply by using some J and L cuts. At the moment it's very:
    Shot of Soldier A saying his line
    Shot of Soldier B saying his line
    Instead try showing some reaction to what is being said.
    Tim

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    Thanks Tim.

    You are right there was a few issues with the audio, had a lot of wind noise to deal with.
    In regards to the keying, I wasn't able to use a greenscreen so I had to hand roto every shot. Have a look at the before and after pics to see what a pain it was.

    Paul

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    Hadn't spotted the B&A. All I can say is I take my hat off to you. Must have taken forever. Have your eyes recovered?
    Tim

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    Yea, but I never want to see another Roto Spline again !

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    hey good shots although the acting is where it lacked it seemed a bit forced not natural.

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    Good video ! I liked the effects.

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