I spend enough time criticising others so here's a film I was responsible for a year ago.
I'm well aware of many of its shortcomings but feel free to criticise - you may even come up with something that hasn't been mentioned before (and even if your criticism is old news to me, others may benefit).
It's been shown at a number of amatuer festivals and whilst not walked away with any wins managed to gain a "Commended" in the 2008 Guernsey Lily, a Silver Diploma in the 2008 Cotswold International and most recently a "Commended" in the 2009 Surrey Film-Video Festival where it was deservedly beaten by Fingercuff's "Tent Boy".
I can recommend amateurs entering films into these festivals as it's an opportunity to get valuable feedback from respected and experienced judges.
If you can't wait, the notorious "flake" episode occurs at 2:38
YouTube - Eye in the Sky