Yup, shoot the Stills Photographer.
No sound for me on this clip I am afraid, but that aside,
Nicely photographed I thought, although I found the constant Fade to/from black very disconcerting and visually annoying after the first couple of fades.
Did you have a second camera on this? The edit would have benefited greatly with cuts from another angle.
But without the sound it is very difficult to comment.
COMPAQ something or other with 500Gb Boot Disk, 1Tb external Firewire Disk, 4Gb Memory and a super duper sound card, 19" TFT Monitor etc etc etc
Sony TRV33e : Sony TRV310e : Canon XM2
Sony Vegas Studio editions to v11
Remember, there is always more to learn than there is to teach.