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    Smile the briefcase, short film

    heres a little video i made.

    http://youtube.com/watch?v=cs7zw50mrww

    hope you enjoy

    constructive criticsm is welcomed.

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    Hey Jack. Great stuff! What a shame about the mic problem at the end though!

    A couple of things that I thought needed addressing.....

    Switch off your autofocus and do it manually. As the guy goes down the stairs, the focus switches to the banister rails. Picky I know, but noticeable I thought.

    I would lift the contrast a snatch along with the colour. I looks a tiny bit washed out. Don't know what you edited it with, but it just needs a bit more colour and vibrancy.

    Sound. I can see exactly what you were doing with the music switches, but the cuts needed to be a snatch tighter I think. The Guru might give you a tip or two with mic sound, he's our resident expert now....

    Overall.... great effort indeed! Love the swallowing bit and without giving the end away, I thought the rest of that part was really well done.

    Keep at it man, great stuff!

    (Oh, and take your shoes off before you go upstairs! )

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    Nice effort Jack! I bet you guys learnt a lot making this.

    I would suggest that you take a hard look at it yourselves. Imagine it was made by your worst enemy and pick out the faults. Self-criticism is the hardest part of video making.

    I liked the idea that each character has their own music, but you need to have other sounds as well. Just music, without the normal day-to-day noises of the door opening and such, makes it appear "dry". Also I found the sound transitions a bit brutal.

    That buzz on the audio shouldn't be there! It sounds like you used a microphone in a line input and then whacked up the gain, or the level was too low to start with.

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    thanks alot guys.

    im not even sure what happened with the mic sound i captured the sound like i always do and it usually sounds perfectly fine but with this when i captured i got a really loud reptitive humming staticy noise, i set the wave settings to just come out of the left speaker as the right didnt work which created a quiter humming noise and louder sound from the video. ill just have to mess about with it.

    really thanks alot ill work on your points for a next video

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    What app do you edit with?

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    i used vegas 6

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    Great stuff. If you check out Mark Ws tutorial HERE you'll see how to bring up the look of your movies. I use Vegas too, so any help needed, just ask.

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    thanks man ill check it out

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    Creative & entertaining, thatís pretty much what itís all about. Good little story, too Ė well done. Itís got a sort of Ďcultí feel to it. I hope you do more and post them here.

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    Being gurus "Right hand audio man" A few more audio points- A sound effect for your explosion at the end is really needed, Frighten the life out of us, This Trapcode demo explosion thingy uses sound effects to make a dull thing brought to life. Try watching it without sound, then with sound and you will see where I am coming from. As for the mic, Were you using a internal one? Because to me it sounds like a jack plug not correctly plugged in, But also check your gain and levels. Also maybe a over dub on the toilet guitar as we really can't hear that. Hope my points help.
    Last edited by LukeD; 01-18-2007 at 04:53 PM.

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