clay_9
Senior Member

A nice little story with a good mix of first and third person shots. I thought it could have been a bit tighter though, knowing when to cut away is really important. To keep it all moving along without feeling like it's dragging is really important. My biggest gripe, and it may be just me, is the way you have implemented the cut to the picture taken with the camera. For me it looks really messy having the images cut over the video, but only to 80% of the screen whilst still seeing the video...

The visuals stood out with some lovely shots, but the audio sounds distant and without clarity. I'd work on the mix, maybe re-record with a different mic if necessary.