I liked your video and thought the music suited it well. Liked the on the shoulder shot as the main character walks towards the large guy, the fight scene is it meant to be funny or serious? If it is meant to be serious then you need to tighten up on where you place the camera, keep it on the blind side of one of your actors so we can't see the contact but we can see the result. The reactions of being punched in the face or abdomen need to be more exaggerated with the actors showing the impact. I had to laugh when the large guy shoved the small guy through the door, lucky for him it was open. What happened to the other guy who knocked the papers out of the main characters hand's in the hallway? The page left on the ground at the end could have been held a bit longer so we get time to read the words on it and is the title meant to be One Last Breath or One Last Breathe?

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