I enjoyed that all the way through - that puts you way ahead of the pack.

personally I am somewhat in awe of any group that finish a drama production such as this. Mine has been in the writing stage of 2 years... I appreciate the work that this has taken to complete.

Everything starts with the script so I am going to mention it. I liked the idea but too much was given away at the start and some of the dialog was pointless and obvious, the bits that 'filled in' stuff about the story for the audience grated. Also even in a ten min short there should be a bit more character development imho.

Filming. Sound, ditto above. Generally the choice of shots was ok and nothing clashed badly. Some scenes looked too flat, the bar was crap. Flashback -weird... in the language of film white vingnette does not mean time past - try slo mo / motion blurr / droppd frame rate / bleached b/w / echo.

Acting - hit man was believable, other characters not.

SFX - needed blood on the mudrer


Sounds like a lot of criticism but behind that I see a well thought out and constructed film.

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