good first start! I have two peices of advice. 1: Dont make it take so long for the car to get dirty...you could even change that peice of the film completly, just have somone drop somthing out of an apartment window or something onto the car, have the kids run in...and tada...or not, just quicken that part up...2: work on the part where you have the kids running in to clean the car, the main charecter (girl) gets in there way...its a very good idea/concept though! I cant wait to see improvments/other films from you! Great job! and good luck!