Good stuff. Infact most of the audio is quite exceptional from other work Ive seen of similar standard.
Editing is always down to personal taste so I wont comment on that too much however the only thing I can think to say is you should have colour graded it. I imported one of your clips into Edition and had a quick go. I'm my opinion it looked so much better and straight away lost that videocamera look. Im happy to show you this if you wish.

Ed

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